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spnanonhaven) wrote2010-10-18 09:53 pm
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Big Bang/Exchange Fic Discussion #1
Post your threads for Big Bangs and exchange fics here.
Format like so:
SUBJECT: Title [Pairing, Rating] by AUTHOR
CONTENT: Art by whoever
http://url of the master post on the BB comm.
Format like so:
SUBJECT: Title [Pairing, Rating] by AUTHOR
CONTENT: Art by whoever
http://url of the master post on the BB comm.
Re: D/C SA Week 5: 10/18 - 10/24
(Anonymous) 2010-11-16 07:13 am (UTC)(link)I really liked the first part of this fic! It's funny and self-referential, with just a light enough touch to make me laugh out loud.
BUT then the fic body proper starts, and it's lost me completely, starting with:
ORLY? It's used to handwave/set up the plot device of Castiel asking Crowley (instead of Gabriel, who is still alive!) for help in starting a prank war against Dean, but nope, not buying it. The rest of the fic flows awkwardly, with some parts overwritten such as these THREE paragraphs of Castiel waiting to meet Crowley:
And it doesn't quite recover from that point. You'd think that a fic that just wrote a super-long scene of Castiel gathering his courage to contact Crowley and ask for help in starting a prank war would be just as overwritten for the rest of it? Ah, but then you'd be wrong, for the pranks go by pretty quickly, Dean assumes Sam did them instead of Castiel, Castiel is bummed, Crowley suddenly shows up claiming Dean's contract which he breaks by kissing Dean--
AND THEN IT'S SUDDENLY THREE MONTHS LATER, AND DEAN AND CASTIEL HAVE BEEN TOGETHER FOR THREE MONTHS, SO WE DIDN'T EVEN SEE DEAN LEARNING ABOUT CASTIEL'S FEELINGS AND HOW THEY GOT TOEGETHER.
Why, author? Why would you do that? Why would you focus on Crowley so much that the D/C is pasted on yay? It's not even a matter of the fic being from Crowley's POV, because it isn't.
This author has plenty of potential, I feel, but they really need a beta to help out in culling the extra fat and help focus the story better. If it weren't a D/C exchange story I wouldn't care as much about how this one played out, but the D/C is so... blink and you'll miss it.
Hah, LOL, it's been a while since a fic started out strongly and suddenly detoured me into flailing frustration.
Re: D/C SA Week 5: 10/18 - 10/24
(Anonymous) 2011-01-02 08:28 pm (UTC)(link)