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spnanonhaven) wrote2010-10-18 09:53 pm
spnanonhaven) wrote2010-10-18 09:53 pm
Big Bang/Exchange Fic Discussion #1
Post your threads for Big Bangs and exchange fics here.
Format like so:
SUBJECT: Title [Pairing, Rating] by AUTHOR
CONTENT: Art by whoever
http://url of the master post on the BB comm.
Format like so:
SUBJECT: Title [Pairing, Rating] by AUTHOR
CONTENT: Art by whoever
http://url of the master post on the BB comm.
Re: D/C SA Week 1: 9/20 - 9/26
(Anonymous) 2010-10-19 02:30 pm (UTC)(link)I like what the author was trying to do (what I think they were trying to do) by capturing a moment of shared vulnerability between Dean and Castiel.
But it's tricky business balancing the introspection, the present action/dialogue and the enthusiastic descriptors (eg. "Dean felt like the moment hung on a spider’s thread. Crystalline and shimmering, spinning slowly, casting colored illusions.") Okay, I see the portrait you're trying to paint, but those are a helluvalot of words you're splashing on there. I think the author can get better at subtlety with practice.
There's also the matter where the emotional sharing in this fic is kinda heavy, and (to me, anyway) I don't think this is something Dean would be immediately ready to do. The fic needs some emotional set-up to make me buy this kind of hardcore EXPLOSIVE romantic heart-to-heart, and I don't feel it's there.
Also: multiple exclamation marks? Not necessary. Really. >.>