I started reading this story and while I didn't see a whole lot of SPAG issues, I just couldn't get past how Jared was coming off as a pervy creeper. It really did remind me of a kink_meme fill, but without the payoff of hot doggy porn, and there were parts that definitely seemed like it could be going in that direction. So without the hot porn to turn it into a kink-fic, it ended up being kinda too creepily pervy for a Disney fill.

Also, don't masturbation scenes with no fade to black rate at least an 'R' rather than 'PG-13'?

I don't know, it's like this fic was a bundle of false expectations that threw me off and tainted the story for me.